First off, congratulations on writing a humorous, original novel! Your characters were intriguing and distinctive, and the dialogue was spot on. The characters were all very well-defined. Their voices were distinctive, and you did an excellent job characterizing Danielle in particular. Well done!
I think the dramatic tone you were aiming for was generally conveyed very well. I just want to reiterate that I found the book amusing and original! Your characters were interesting, and your plot was organized and entertaining. I wish you all the best for this manuscript and future books.
The book tells an entertaining story with engaging characters. The main characters—Danielle, Jess, Max, and Ted are all likeable and well-thought-out characters with interesting back stories. The love triangle element of the story is resolved in a terribly tragic way at the climax of this book, giving Part I a more-or-less complete story arc while laying a pretty good foundation for Part II. It’s very well done.
The story reads well. The writing flows nicely and is easy to understand.